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Brittle Under Pressure

By Andrew Wilson
August 18, 2025
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Siro stumbled through the door, head swimming, eyes blurred. Blood oozed through his fingers as he held his side and took a seat at the bar. He pulled the coat heโ€™d stolen closer to his body to hide the wound from view. It was bad.

It was a Tuesday. Dim orange and blue lighting and leather stools reeked of loneliness and regret. It was a shithole. There were two lone stragglers at the bar and three tables taken up by small groups of early morning drinkers. A vague cowboy theme permeated all the signage, though little to no real decorations matched that aesthetic. The rustic appeal was due to age rather than style. Siro chose this spot so that Jason could get to it quickly.

โ€œYou donโ€™t look so hot, mister,โ€ the woman behind the counter stated. A redundant and stupid social expectation to point out the obvious to start a conversation. That type of comment normally annoyed Siro, but he was too drained to feel anything but pain.

โ€œIโ€™m fine. Scotch, neat,โ€ he said.

โ€œYou want some ice with that?โ€ she asked.

โ€œWhat does neat mean?โ€

She looked shocked at his curt response. He knew that wasnโ€™t what she had meant. He rose and limped to the restroom. Lucky for him, the door had a lock on it. The cracked and smudged mirror showed a man clinging to consciousness. A blackened eye, a slashed cheek, a torn collar. His forearm throbbed from where heโ€™d landed on it. Siro eased the coat off his shoulders to inspect the hole in his side.

A bullet had gone straight through on his right, a hair below his ribs. Since he wasnโ€™t dead, it hadnโ€™t hit anything too vital. The quick wrap heโ€™d done already needed to be changed. He braced himself as he prepared to pull the cloth off the bleeding orifice. A piece of childrenโ€™s clothing, a small, once pink and white T-shirt, was drenched in blood. Peeling it off hurt like hell. The hole burbled, leaked, and dripped all over the floor and himself. He didnโ€™t have any bandages with him. He clenched his jaw as he stuffed the hole with hand towels from the broken dispenser. Washing his hands was pointless. No matter how hard he scrubbed, he couldnโ€™t get the red tint off.

Siro exited the bathroom and returned to the bar. His whiskey waited for him, no ice in sight. The bartender was nowhere to be seen. He sat back down and took a large gulp. It stung his cut lip and burned as it went down. Sheโ€™d given him the cheap shit. He supposed he deserved that. The already bare bar had emptied in the minutes he was locked in the bathroom. It was just him and his pain now.

The door opened the second his ass hit the barstool. The whiskey hadnโ€™t worked its magic yet, he didnโ€™t have the energy to turn. But a brief feeling of relief came over him as the newcomerโ€™s footsteps came closer and closer until they were directly next to him.

โ€œYou look like shit,โ€ Jason said as he sat down on the adjacent stood.

โ€œHelp me,โ€ Siro said. He chose to ignore the comment for the second time tonight.

โ€œWhat happened?โ€

โ€œJob went south; I need to lay low.โ€

โ€œHow?โ€

โ€œI stay at your apartment in Amber.โ€

โ€œNo, how did the job go wrong,โ€ Jason asked. He sounded irritated already.

โ€œDoesnโ€™t matter.โ€

Jason looked him up and down, his eyes rested on the crusted blood that had come from underneath his coat.

โ€œLooks like it does,โ€ he said.

โ€œWhereโ€™s that bartender? I need another drink,โ€ Siro said.

โ€œYou said you had an easy way to make a lot from a little work,โ€ Jason retorted. โ€œThis doesnโ€™t look like a little work.โ€

โ€œIt was supposed to be. I got lied to,โ€ Siro said.

โ€œWhat was the job?โ€

โ€œA snatch, thatโ€™s all they fucking said.โ€

โ€œKidnapping? You didnโ€™t tell me.โ€

โ€œI needed the payday.โ€

Siro lied. He hadnโ€™t told Jason because he knew Jason wouldnโ€™t have wanted to take a job with so few details and so large a payday attached to it. Heโ€™d have called it too good to be true.

Jason shook his head. โ€œDon’t give me that. You arenโ€™t that careless.โ€

โ€œI need you to get me out of here. It’s bad. I canโ€™t be seen for a while.โ€

โ€œIโ€™m not helping you if I donโ€™t know what happened.โ€

Siro didnโ€™t answer.

โ€œFine, youโ€™re welcome to wait here for the cops.โ€ Jason stood up and took a few steps towards the door.

โ€œIt wonโ€™t be cops coming.โ€

Jason stopped. โ€œWho?โ€

โ€œEnforcers.โ€ He couldnโ€™t see him, but his instincts told him that his buddy tensed up at the word.

โ€œSiro, what did you do.โ€

โ€œI didnโ€™t know it was the Donโ€™s daughter.โ€

It was Jasonโ€™s turn to be silent.

โ€œThe hit was the hotel on Elm. They gave me a room number and a name, Abigail. He told me sheโ€™d be alone. Fucking liar. No clue she was a kid. Didnโ€™t know sheโ€™d be young enough to need a nanny or mom or whoever with her.โ€

Siro looked up at the ceiling. The multicolored lights mixed into a serene, muted purple. He saw only red.

โ€œChrist, Siro. What did you do?โ€

Silence.

โ€œWhat did you do?โ€

โ€œI panicked.โ€

โ€œHowโ€™d you get out?โ€

โ€œWindow. They boxed me in. I took a round in the crossfire. I grabbed a shirt to stuff it and jumped.โ€

โ€œWhere is the daughter now?โ€

Siro said nothing. He put his head in his hands.

โ€œIโ€™m getting sick of repeating myself.โ€

โ€œI couldnโ€™t get her out.โ€

โ€œSheโ€™s in the hotel? Thatโ€™s fine. This is salvageable.โ€

โ€œShe saw my face.โ€

โ€œOk, you have a witness, plus the mom. Not good but theyโ€™ll tighten security and that will be that. Lie low and itโ€™ll blow over.”

โ€œThere’s no witness.โ€

โ€œWhat?โ€

โ€œShe saw my face. So did the mom.โ€

When he closed his eyes, all Siro could see was her face.

Jason understood.

โ€œWhat the fuck?โ€

โ€œI panicked. Youโ€™ve got to help me.โ€ Siroโ€™s voice was muffled as he spoke with his head on the countertop.

โ€œWhy the fuck did you ask for my help? I donโ€™t want to be involved in this.โ€

โ€œI didnโ€™t know what else to do.โ€

Siro couldnโ€™t tell what was happening in Jasonโ€™s head. He still stood behind him. Siroโ€™s vision was blurry.

โ€œThe enforcers, they had to have seen you if they shot you.โ€

โ€œI killed the one who hit me and his partner. Backup came, but I jumped out the window. I doubt they got a good view.โ€

โ€œBut they could have.โ€

โ€œThey probably didnโ€™t.โ€

Jason took a deep breath.

โ€œI donโ€™t know what to do man I panicked,โ€ Siro said. He sobbed.

โ€œHey, itโ€™s alright. You can lay low in Amber for a while, and itโ€™ll all blow over soon.โ€

โ€œThank you.โ€

โ€œNow come on, let’s go. We should leave while itโ€™s still dark out.โ€

Siro lifted his head, hopeful for the first time tonight. It was the last thought he had.

His body went limp; head slammed down on the bar as his ass slid off the seat and crumpled to the floor. He never heard the bullet.

Jason put his gun back in its holster. He took his phone out and snapped a picture of Siroโ€™s corpse. The counter and the shelf of liquor behind it were covered in viscera. He didnโ€™t need to worry about the bartender; heโ€™d already paid her to take the rest of the night off. He took a rag, wet it with vodka, and wiped off the stool and the area of the bar where heโ€™d sat.

The front was locked and the sign said closed. Jason exited through the backdoor and prayed that the Don would be happier that he killed Siro than he would be mad that he was Siroโ€™s first call for help.


Editor: Michelle Naragon & Shannon Hensley

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  1. Leah 18 August, 2025 at 22:04 Reply

    Insane ending, the writing itself is so good too

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